Board Thread:Fun and Games/@comment-35702393-20180628083548/@comment-34320391-20180706153752

I really liked the part of yours, Cora, where Mr Smith says, "But you will eat at the mess hall, not my table." Nice touch, stood out to me for some reason.

Also, Cora, remember to use paragraphs so it is easy to read.

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Also, Hana, wow! Unless that was a direct transpose of a scene of Romeo and Juliet (which it probably is), it's intriguing to read. I was never good at writing in that genre (or never tried).

Also, I know it doesn't matter really, but you called Trista, Juliet, in the last part of your non-canon section. Just to prove that I read it.