User blog comment:Invisiblewing/HTTYD Retelling/Fanfiction: Part 9/@comment-12598077-20130726141109

I probably would have had Hiccup mention something about how his thoughts were working their way through the logic that had snuck by him that day in the woods. Remember how slowly those words had come? It wasn't something he could see, so he had to feel his way to that...I guess epiphany is close to what I mean (need to actually look that word up).

Suggestion for what comes next: I've read a couple other versions of this where somebody tries to give a dragon an eel and Hiccup then stops them...kinda after-the-fact. But as long as you have him thinking about the fish early, have him remember to check their baskets for eels before the dragons come out. Oh, and show him getting the other three dragons out of their pens before displaying the Monstrous Nightmare; those three were already loose when we turn around at the end of that scene, so they'd obviously been first. He gives Astrid the Nadder first because she'd given him hope, gives Fishlegs the Gronkle because he was one of the nicer guys and he'd basically called that one, and then gives the Zippleback to the twins not because of anything they'd done directly but because he wants to stall as long as possible before letting out the dragon that had almost killed him. Snotlout would have been the hardest guy to convince anyway.

Having Hiccup compare Stormfly's aerodynamics to Toothless's would be cool, too. She's the second dragon he's ever ridden, and this is his first ride on her; comparasion is inevitable.

I hope you don't see me as trying to write your fic. But it looked to me like you needed suggestions for continuing what you had, and I have plenty.