User blog comment:Toothless the Nightfury/Storms and Strike Class (fan fiction)/@comment-9808809-20131221011053

Great story this was a great fan fiction. I don't read many because they often stray to far from the story and ruin it in ways but yours would be worth in putting in the offical franchise or something. I have a couple words of critism that don't really affect the story/plot at all. One is that you might want to rvise some words like check spelling or chose better words not many but still caught a couple mistakes for this. Two, you took a lot of this from both the book and media franchise but mostly the franchise. The book and movie have almost no correlation in plot I believe or very little so try not to include information that hasn't been spilled by the franchise yet because it kind of makes you out of it a little like the name of the main tribe is not yet mentioned so don't mention please. I mean it is just better to not yet mention the tribe. Also small parts could be a little more accurate to the franchise but not in like plotwise but more lorewise. Desipte that it was amazingly worthy to read and sounds like a writter of the dreamworks series wold accept it.