User blog comment:Toothless the Nightfury/Storms and Strike Class (fan fiction)/@comment-7845946-20130330011819

You do really good with making the characters act in character. I do have one concern though, you have very short sentences. Example: Both Gobber and Mulch were twitching. (End) They were shaking slightly all over. (End) The other teens and there dragons came up to make an inspection. (End) Don't get me wrong, it's a great story, but you have a lot of short sentences though.