Board Thread:Fun and Games/@comment-34320391-20180712000122/@comment-34320391-20180720080455

You make can make it multiple parts if you want. That's pretty interesting. One point though, in the third last paragraph say "Who could it have been?" Maybe you start thinking someone's out there to get you, a stalker (Newt?), or someone worse (a murderer)...

Also, make sure your section ties into the plot. Currently, it doesn't have any components you can reference later, except for the red shimmery object. Maybe this scares Cora, changing her personality about the forest and the dark, or something.

Good job!